Two sea god brothers meet for the first time in 100 years.
How do we make their reunion as exciting as we envision it in our heads?
Let’s find out by editing a viewer’s story together!
During the last stream, viewer EricaDeel submitted their story to be revised by the Story Surgeon. She’d written the first draft of a prologue, but it wasn’t packing as much punch as she wanted.
The first draft was bogged down by too much info, not enough emotion, and a few choices that made the reader hate the character we were supposed to cheer for.
We had a lot to do to get this patient back on its feet, but I think we did a pretty good job!
Watch us read the story, explain what needs to be changed,
then read the rewrite here!
If you want to join us and help write a story by trolling in chat, or share your own writing for feedback, then we’d love to have you join us on Twitch.
And you missed the stream, you can still watch them on the YouTube channel or watch the full stream reruns.
Hope to see you next time, friend!
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