For the last stream’s exercise, we did something we’ve done before: edit the beginning of a viewer’s story.
FateOfSilver was generous enough to allow us to use their story for the exercise. But this time, rather than completely rewrite what they had written, we instead focused on doing more detail-oriented editing. FateOfSilver had crafted a nice opening, but it was a little too fast and was missing out on some juicy specifics.
So we employed a tactic that I wrote about nearly two years ago: cracking open scenes with the Hammer of Details.
Take a look at the original and our rewrites below.